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ReplyDeleteTo be blunt, it is rushed and unformatted. It does have a lot of information though. I think you should add some of other elements into the writing. I can see it manufactures oil and olives, but the writing does not end with a question. A way of organization could be to group the governmental facts first, then agricultural and trade next. I also think the writing should talk to the reader, ask more questions or maybe just spend a whole sentence in text.
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